[Writing] The Elves of Talgel discussion thread

*is still crying over what you did in wayward* ;_;

I have a thing with characters people tend to root for

Spoiler for if you don't want a minor spoiler.:

and killing them.

Yeah, no kidding. I liked that troll... 

Can't just kill the bad guys.

Ronald R. R. Martin

*maniacal laugh*

Alrighty.

I've made Baroness Von Trap's Jules' changes and finished Chapter Four.

Bon Appétit

Oh, and we're at 11,000 words.

 

Wow I really messed up last time    I don't know how I thought I was reading Chapters 3 & 4  lol

You really know how to weave a yarn, sir.  Your descriptive skills are excellent as always, you hold me captive. I want to continue reading and to know more. And I'll be honest with you, when I first started reading, I was not expecting to like it. I have a confession, I saw Elves and trolls and thought.. oh great, another LOTR fan fiction. But it isn't at all. This is a wonderful tale!  I'm a fan

Spoiler for the nitpicky:

When they were younger and before they join the military

joined?

“General Galebre,” interjected a short elf who was pondering the map that rested on the middle of the a table that occupied most of the room.
Aldor himself took a moment to look around the room. The circular stone room was covered in tomes and books on shelves that took up nearly the entire surface of every wall. ...Not one was being used at the moment to hold a resting body at the moment. 

Lots of repeating words, threw me off a bit when reading.

Most of them, however, if they had been able to, fled to the protection of the more fortified cities.<--commas

Of course he had heard tales of the distant men who well naturally shorter than elves and of the dwarves who were shorter still, but Tanare had always struck Aldor as an oddity.

distant men who were*?

The commander uniform he wore: a purple shirt underneath a plate of metal armor that cover his chest and white breeches seemed immaculate.

metal armor that covered*

Aldor looked ahead of him now. He was certain that just beyond his seeing, which of course was quite far for an elf, that there was an expanse of grass without a single tree on it.

that that again lol xD

They house her parents called home was directly beside their own.

The*

Every elf their age, as well as a few older and younger, envied their love, for as much as Eled defied what was typical amongst the elven race with his pranks and antics, Aldor and Imroden showed their love more publicly and beautifully than any other couple in Talgel.  <--commas

Ps. I hope you don't mind my being nitpicky >_<  I'm honestly just trying to help out. And maybe save you a bit of money hiring an editor lol xD 

I greatly appreciate your nitpickiness!

And I'm glad you like the story too Jules. It means a lot that you're enjoying something you didn't think you'd like at first.

Truly.

I have two chapters left of Winter's Tale, and Wayward has been bumped to the top of my reading list  

I'm very excited for you to meet my favorite goblin: Stinkrunt.

I think I may be editing this post around a bit. Just heads up for all you faithful readers (all 4 of you  ).

Alrighty, just made the change. This is the elves discussion thread now. The actual story will be here for you to enjoy.

Chapter Five is finished.

Don't cry.

Edit: Also there is now Chapter Six. Which is more troll goodness.

Oh man, I am so far behind!  I'll try to get to this next week too. So much reading! *_*

Oh man, I am so far behind!  I'll try to get to this next week too. So much reading! *_*

Lol. I've even waking up early to write. Which would explain the nine chapters that are ready to read.

Exciting news!

The Elves of Talge is now published!

Grab your copy here!

And please be kind, leave an honest review.

Late response

Daaaaaaang, man. You're a machine! B) Will have to take a look sometime~ Still trying to catch up on the other one ;_;

I forgive you for your tardiness.

An apology in the form of an honest review of anything I write is also acceptable!