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We make the Future and Tomorrow with our Hands RPG combines elements of JRPG's and Western RPG's with a Classic Anime atmosphere as well as bringing it's own unique style and story telling.

Story
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5 Years prior to the events of the story, there was a huge war. The war was built up over the years when there was a great need for money, for territory control. The great country of Ghistall needed help controlling it's own people, what made the people of Ghistall riot against it's own country is a mystery. The mysterious country of Muraldin, which has a confusing and secret political back story, sent it's own troops to help control Ghistall. The war broke out into chaos when the King of Rukhulda was assassinated by a secret organization. The events of the war soon became too confusing that everybody not involved stopped caring and became almost like a fairy tale to them. However for those with family members fighting in the war, it's a time of great melancholy and uncertainty.
5 Years later, the war is still going on with people going on with their daily lives. Arabella is a over emotional and caring young farmer who's father is fighting the war. She lives with Syferness, her younger sibling who's very talented with the piano and curious about many thing but is yet very shy, and her loving and caring mother. They live in the small forest town, Rustrub Village of Muraldin. One night Arabella hears Syferness talking to what appears to be the spirit of their Father, Franz who died in the war. Arabella becomes suspicious of the event. The next day, Arabella and Syferness visit their close friend, Maxwell who just became old enough to enlist in the Royal Army. Maxwell is hoping to move up the ranks so he could one day have greater political influence over the war, he is an idealistic young man with a somewhat childish point of view on the way the world works but he takes his ideals very seriously. He wants to put an end to all wars in the future.
The night Arabella has fateful dream. A spirit named Tchamorkus who comes from a planet that specializes in Spiritual Science where the entire population is elves, Tchamorkus is trapped inside a black hole, from there she can contact other worlds through people's dreams by using a Spirit Network device similar to a laptop and a virtual reality head-set. Tchamorkus makes a deal with Arabella. Tchamorkus will give Arabella her power if Tchamorkus can use her body to release her soul from her body and roam the planet to explore. Tchamorkus reveals to Arabella that she is running away from the afterlife because she is afraid. Her religion believes that Spiritual Science is a unforgivable abomination to the rules of life and all who practice it will die in eternal suffering. Many people who practice Spiritual Science remove their souls from their body and spend their entire lives roaming the galaxy hiding in black holes and finding different universes where they can feel safe with the rules of the universe. Arabella agrees to her conditions. Arabella's body releases Tchamorkus's soul and in return Arabella receives Tchamorkus's Spiritual Power along with her power Arabella gained the power to hear and have conversations with other Spirits.
The following week Arabella and her family decide to take a visit the City of Barladeen to shop and stay in the Hotel. On their trip to the market things get busy, Syferness has been getting a lot of dirty looks from some people. Arabella's Mother decided it was time to go when an Elf has been found murdered in a back alley, Syferness wonders why she is the only Elf in the family, Arabella's Mother unwillingly reveals to Syferness that she was adopted. The day after another Elf was murdered, Arabella's Mother decides it's too unsafe for Syferness to stay here and they all travel through Melancholy Forest where they were attacked by a Demon, a Mucklock. Arabella and Syferness fights with the Mucklock, but Syferness's hands where injured in the fight. They go to the doctors, the doctor revealed that a bone in her hand is broken. Syferness goes into a deep depression where she thinks negatively about humanity and racism, and over bearing sorrow about not having to play the piano ever again. Arabella's Mother also goes into depression about not having the courage to protect Syferness. That evening, Maxwell says goodbye to Arabella and leaves to join the Military. Arabella feels lonely and ashamed about not feeling sorry as she does about everyone, she starts to wonder if her kindness and friendliness is just an act to keep an image. A confusing and self-indulgent pattern of thoughts starts to fill her mind. "You are selfish." "Don't you care about Syferness? About your father going to war? He is probably dead." "Why are you worrying about yourself when everyone around you is suffering?" Arabella falls into depression.
That night Arabella over hears another conversation between Syferness and the spirit of Franz. Franz tells Syferness that all of humanity has some form a hatred living inside of them. He continues to speak negatively of humanity to Syferness. He makes a deal with Syferness saying that if Syferness should ever die, that Franz will take over Syferness's body and continue living as her in disguise, in return, Franz will use his Spiritual Power to heal Syferness's hands so that she may one day make a living playing the piano. The next morning Syferness's hands are healed. Arabella tells her Mother about what happened last night, Arabella's Mother slapped her and told her not to make a mockery of Syferness's miracle. Arabella spends the rest of the day in her room while Arabella's Mother cries in her room as the depression grows deeper in Arabella until she starts harboring suicidal thoughts.
That night, Arabella has a dream about a strange empty room where she sits across from a strange child. The child doesn't reveal his name even when asked but he does say he was around even since the creation of all existence and time. He reveals that he remembers all even his conscious before the creation of existence and time and has a theory that all people were conscious of thought even before birth. He finds Arabella's emotional reactions very intriguing. Unlike Tchamorkus, This mysterious boy is not a spirit he reveals, he is not sure what he is however he reveals that he is playing some sort of mind game with another one like him where he has to kill the host of whoever is harboring his opponents spirit. He reveals that the host is a serial killer named Bludbigen and the person who is hosting him is a person who enjoys killing like it's a game. The people like the mysterious young boy are a type of people who spend eternity just watching life through their host's eyes and occasionally talking the host through dreams. There aren't many like him in this world, he says. He explains the rules of his life. Once their host dies they will spend some time in dark space, a whole universe of seemingly nothing until they feel some sort of warm tingle all over their body, that's their signal to find a bright light and fly towards it. Once there, they will meet their host for the first time. The host will then decide wither or not they want this person to stay inside their mind, if so the person will than watch life through their eyes while staying making themselves at home. The person can grant the Host their power if they choose to.
The mysterious young boy says he once fell in love with his last host until Bludbigen killed his host. The last thing of his last Hosts memory was gazing into Bludbigen's eyess. He saw his opponent. He reveals that the opponent was his brother who he has remembered when they shared the same host together, the host of a Cave-woman back in prehistoric times. His brother talked the Cave-woman into murdering another one of her kind, ever since then the mysterious boy swore his existence to spending eternity playing this game with his brother. Using the host to kill each other. He using his host to kill his opponents host so that he may one day seize his mass murders. Arabella agrees to help him find Bludbigen so that she may find herself doing a useful cause.
The next day a detective drops in for a visit, his name is Irving R. Wolfen. Irving tells Arabella that he has a person living in his thoughts too, He calls the people MindScapes. They combine the Soul with their own Souls becoming a part of you until the host dies. His MindScape can sense other MindScapes and can pin-point the exact location other MindScapes. MindScapes experience emotions differently than other MindScapes, they feed off the emotions of their hosts, MindScapes emotions feel differently as human emotions, it's unexplainable how emotions feel for them. As children their MindScapes take the form of Imaginary friends until they are long forgotten as a fragment of their imagination and dreams. If a MindScape meets their host as an adult, they stay longer in their memories as adults have a more structured mind in most cases, but their minds are still developing.
Irving R. Wolfen accepted his MindScape as she helps him solve cases. Irving R. Wolfen wants Arabella to join him on his case as she is involved, Arabella gladly accept.

And so the journey begins....


Characters

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Arabella Lorishra
Arabella Lorishra is a Farmer. She seems like a happy and caring person but she is very emotional and a over-thinker. She is hiding many secrets. She cares deeply about her mother and sister. Her dream is to raise a child but she thinks she'll never make a good mother due to some morbid thoughts she carries. She worries about how she'll turn out when she grows up to be an older adult.
Age: 21

Syferness Lorishra
Syferness is Arabella's sister. She is an Elf who can talk to Spirits like all elves who do in secrecy. She wants to make a living playing the piano. She is a victim of racism and creates a negative attitude towards human-non-elves. She is very curious about the Government and wants to find more information about the group of people who are the Government and why the world is the way it is. She talks to her father's spirit some nights.
Age: 11

Maxwell Brunel
Maxwell is a Novelist and a Knight who is going to enlist in the Royal Army. He wants to join the army in hopes of advancing the military ranks and thinks that once he get's to the highest rank, he'll have greater political influences. His view of the world is childish but he takes his ideals very seriously. He hopes to stop war once and for all, he hopes to end racism, start world peace, end world hunger. He came into Rustrub Village with no Mother or Father at the age of 14. He was dying of hunger and thirst until a woman took him in and adopted him. He refuses to talk about his past. He became friends with Arabella at the age of 15 and they became close ever since. At the Age of 19 Maxwell dropped out of College, taking a Writing Class. Ever since Maxwell started drinking Alcohol and committed illegal acts.
Age: 22

Irving R. Wolfen
A Detective who lives in Barladeen. He is a very calm and well-spoken man. Despite being very good at his job, he actually isn't very smart and isn't very good at social situations, he prefers to avoid conversations that aren't related to his job and avoids eye contact. He only has elaborate conversations with people he's close to. He never reveals his thoughts or opinions to anyone even to those he's close to. He fears to die due to believing eternal suffering awaits his death. He is actually pretty childish.
Age: 28



More character descriptions will be added as development of the game grows.


Features

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STORY FOCUSING ON DIRECTION: The story focuses on atmosphere, emotions and feelings as well as a reflection of the creator's opinions and feelings towards such topic as hatred, war, racism, emotions, bullying in the adult stage of life, and sub-conscious thoughts.

COMBINATIONS OF RPG ELEMENTS: The game combines the strategy and depth of a JRPG you might find in games like Final Fantasy Tactics and Pokemon with the free-roaming elements of a Western RPG you may find in games like Morrowind and Fallout as well as bringing it's own RPG elements to the RPG world.

STRATEGIC BATTLE SYSTEM: A battle system that rewards you for being creative and clever with how you fight. Actually the battle system was inspired by my favorite fighting game of all time, Naruto Shippuden: Ultimate Ninja Storm Generations. I'm not even a fan of Naruto but the fighting system is very strategic and less about learning combos and more about the strategy. I want the same feeling of depth and strategy as that battle system and am working very hard to achieve that goal. I'm doing this by looking at what Ultimate Ninja Storm did to fighting games, it put almost no empathize on combos and more about forming a strong team, using their jutsus to create and get out of different situations of battle. So what this game does to RPG's is putting almost no empathize on Elements Resistance and Weaknesses and a lot more empathize on making and getting out of situations. Enemies will lower your defense, raise their critical hit ratio and start attacking you. Some will lower your turn and damper your speed so your turn will rarely come. With the mass amount of spirits you can use, you too can make up your own strategic plan.

Screen Shots

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The story of the great war....



Oh Arabella, you look so happy....



Here you can edit your stats.



Weapons can level up just like characters.



Ever single equipment has their own properties which makes them unique.



This is what exploring will look like.



Whoa! Hey! You can't just expect to walk into any old house uninvited!  :V



Here you can build relationships with people!



If your relationship is high enough they will reveal their story to you.



When you make an unbreakable bond, their spirit will always be with you, meaning they give their spiritual friendship to you.



This is what it looks like when you equip their spirit. An actor can have 3 Spirit's equipped at a time.



This is the battle system! It's very flexible to fit a strategy you have in mind.



Here's the grid inventory system. Every character has one, only they can use what items they have in their inventory. Let's say Arabella has a potion but it's Syferness's turn. Syferness can't use that potion because it's not in her inventory, to use it's effects Syferness has to wait till Arabella's turn and have her use the potion on Syferness.


Credits

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Music
Fullmetal Alchemist OST
Fullmetal Alchemist Brotherhood OST
Tsubasa Resevrior Chronicles OST
Sailor Moon OST
Puella Magica Madoka Magi OST
Super Mario Galaxy OST
Ys Seven OST
Ys Origins OST
Blazblue Continuum Shift Extend OST


Scripts
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Event Lag Reduction - by KGC - Translation by Mr. Anonymous
File Encryption - by KGC - Translation by Mr. Anonymous
Compress Save File - by KGC - Translation by Mr. Anonymous
Dialogue System - by Zeriab
Item Instances Base - by modern algebra
Action Cost Card Turn System - by wltr3565
Reedo's Simple Side Battle System - by Reedo
Critical Flash - by Jens009
EVA/HIT/CRI States - by puppeto4
Damage Popup - by modern algebra
Desperation Attacks - by Zylos
Battler HUD - by Pacman
Random Battle Themes - by DiamondPlatinum3
Regenerate HP/MP on Defense - by Synthisize
Flash Enemy Selected - by modern algebra
Enemy Levels - by Yanfly
Snapshot Battle Back - by Yanfly
Controlled Encounter Rate - by Yanfly
Show Slip Damage - by Cozziekuns
Counterattack - by Shanghai
Critical Bonus State - by Cozziekuns
Weapon Unleashes - by TDS
Critical Buffs - by Shanghai
Skills with HP Cost - by modern algebra
Scene Pictures - by Pacman
Scene Status ReDux - by Yanfly
Distribute Parameter - by KGC
Spirits System - by 332211
Paragraph Formatter - by modern algebra
Grid Inventory - by modern algebra
Hospital Fees - by Shanghai
Day-to-Night Phases - by KGC
Simple Storage System - by Deriru
PPT System - by Master I
Platforming System - by Amethyst
Caterpillar Script - by Zeraib
Dark Cloud Weapons - by xBrokenSin
Floating Event Names - by Woratana
Dynamic Lighting - by Marc
Simple Shadows - by Marc
Neo Message System - by Woratana
Simple Reputation System - by XIV


Battle Themes
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7mVJjztrmVk
Normal Battle 1 (Also when Irving powers up)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WMPSelvrVzg
Normal Battle 2

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tj7K67PbSEw
Normal Battle 3 (Also when Arabella turns into a magical girl)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XR_F5hzSo6o
Normal Battle 4

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j6-xEgXXyGo
Boss Battle


Well hope you are looking forwards to this, more information will be published as the game devolopes.
« Last Edit: December 16, 2012, 05:35:40 AM by yuyubabe »

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Woah bro.

That's a lot of text.
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If you're trying to get someone interested in your game, give yourself three sentences to pique their interest. Look on the back of most game cases. They barely have more than 5 or 6 well thought out sentences.

If you want to keep all that text in the post, that's fine, but you should consider using spoiler tags:
[ spoiler ]
Your content here
[ / spoiler ]

Use that, but without the spaces. It may be worthwhile to put your screen shots in spoiler tags as well.

All that said, I see good bones for a good game! I would be interested in trying it out once you release a demo. I see a few grammar errors: "who's" instead of "whose" in Mathlis' bio for example.

Thanks for posting your progress and I hope you continue on with your project!

Oh, also check out this link . It may prove useful.
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I like the ideas you have for the game and the screenshots look pretty nice as well. Hopefully you can pull it off because the concept sounds awesome. The battle screenshot looks weird though, probably because of the tab on the right side the battle screen.
Oh and welcome back sir, I'm guessing that mmo is on the shelf? Or worse?

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Woah bro.

That's a lot of text.

If you're trying to get someone interested in your game, give yourself three sentences to pique their interest. Look on the back of most game cases. They barely have more than 5 or 6 well thought out sentences.

If you want to keep all that text in the post, that's fine, but you should consider using spoiler tags:
[ spoiler ]
Your content here
[ / spoiler ]

Use that, but without the spaces. It may be worthwhile to put your screen shots in spoiler tags as well.

All that said, I see good bones for a good game! I would be interested in trying it out once you release a demo. I see a few grammar errors: "who's" instead of "whose" in Mathlis' bio for example.

Thanks for posting your progress and I hope you continue on with your project!

Oh, also check out this link . It may prove useful.

Thanks for that spoiler tag! I was looking for that when I made that first post :P

I like the ideas you have for the game and the screenshots look pretty nice as well. Hopefully you can pull it off because the concept sounds awesome. The battle screenshot looks weird though, probably because of the tab on the right side the battle screen.
Oh and welcome back sir, I'm guessing that mmo is on the shelf? Or worse?

Sadly that MMO has been cancled cuz that sever couldn't stay online :(
Anyways thnkz the demo will be released sumtime soon~ I'm thinking after Janurary~!

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New changes with in depth information on the changes!

1= New title! We make the Future and Tomorrow with our Hands RPG.  :V<(It kind of grabs your attention doesn it?)
I think it kind of tells you not only the theme of the story but also gives you sort of a feeling of what the games story feels like.

2= The new battle themes, before the battle themes were kind of traditional and only created a little atmosphere, but now the songs are lyrical and sort of gives some hidden atmosphere that a song without lyrics couldn't achieve.

3= There will be a slight and unexpected change to the story differen to that you see written on the first post. I will say that it has to do something with the mindscapes and it is hinted at under the first post's credits department written under the battle themes, yes Arabella is going to become a Magical Girl but it's much more than that, you'll have to see for yourself when the demo comes out~!

Well that's all for this update. Hope this doesn't count as bumping the thread, I'm just kinda excited for this project.

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I'm so glad you're excited about your project bud. Keep that because it'll get difficult later on when you feel bogged down. I'm also glad you're putting so much thought into your game.

However.

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I stopped reading your backstory after I encountered the fifth grammar error or so. I also got a little confused and had to go back and retread several sentences. I'm telling you: to make your game thread more appealing to those who come looking at it you MUST make use of the spoiler tag. A wall of text is going to deter most people just looking for screen shots and a download link. Just some friendly advice.

Looking forward to you releasing your demo!

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=o Just a bit of advice~

You're using a lot of scripts. Be careful with that, as it can make the game more complex than it needs to be.

The outdoor screenshots look pretty good, but the indoor ones need just a little more clutter~

Lastly, be careful with how much text you use when describing your game. You don't want to discourage people from the game. I think a lot of people would like a quick summary of what the game's about.~

Good luck with the game! :ladyj:
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Hooray! A clean thread is a happy thread!  Looking much better.

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Your title does a lot right, but "the Future and Tomorrow" is redundant and it makes it really long. I think it would be better if you removed one of them and had either:

"We Make Tomorrow with our Hands RPG"
or
"We Make the Future with our Hands RPG"

I would also get rid of "RPG", but that's your choice.

Good luck! And I agree that a wall of text is hard to get through when it comes to marketting, but I think it is fine currently since otherwise, you wouldn't be able to receive any feedback on backstory before releasing a demo. You should put spaces between your paragraphs though.
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Thnx everyone for the insightful reviews about teh post!

Hey I have a weird question, what would happen if we all stopped paying taxes? Not things like the household would stop getting things like water or electricity, what would happen on the Government side of things? Would they not get any more money and eventually go bankrupted? I need to know this because the story is leaning towards this plot line.

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Thnx everyone for the insightful reviews about teh post!

Hey I have a weird question, what would happen if we all stopped paying taxes? Not things like the household would stop getting things like water or electricity, what would happen on the Government side of things? Would they not get any more money and eventually go bankrupted? I need to know this because the story is leaning towards this plot line.
Normally, you'd go to jail and the government would take everything you own. If EVERYONE stopped paying all at once, the government would go broke. Likely they'd borrow more money from international creditors, but that would dry up very quickly. Gov't offices would begin to close down, civil servants would be laid off, military personnel - this is all weeks after the fact because the first thing the government would do is lie and say they have plenty of money...then, after all that and the government not being able to pay its financial obligations, china would literally own everything.

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Thnx everyone for the insightful reviews about teh post!

Hey I have a weird question, what would happen if we all stopped paying taxes? Not things like the household would stop getting things like water or electricity, what would happen on the Government side of things? Would they not get any more money and eventually go bankrupted? I need to know this because the story is leaning towards this plot line.
Normally, you'd go to jail and the government would take everything you own. If EVERYONE stopped paying all at once, the government would go broke. Likely they'd borrow more money from international creditors, but that would dry up very quickly. Gov't offices would begin to close down, civil servants would be laid off, military personnel - this is all weeks after the fact because the first thing the government would do is lie and say they have plenty of money...then, after all that and the government not being able to pay its financial obligations, china would literally own everything.

Oh thnx so much for the info~!  :V<(Very interesting!)

literally less than 20 seconds with google
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20080614195059AAjDwrJ
Yes I know google exists but it's much easier to get the exact information I want if I ask it myself so sorry if this bothers you and I'll stop being lazy and use Yahoo Answers in the future :P

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What bothers me is that you didn't even try to look and research the topic at all before asking. At least you didn't start a whole topic. . .
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