Your spelling and grammar are terrible.
Your plot has no defined structure it just starts out with nothing.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dramatic_structure
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Grammar
Ok i get the grammar But i told this is how it starts Some of this stuff sucks im gonna Change
Roy,What do you think its like outside of here outside
of Forthcoming Island. we can only walk so much in
this small island.
Ha, Stop trying to act like that but why do you
care, Is it bothering you Rose?
Roy, You dont know anything I wanna know if theres
other people .. are we a small race?
Yeah. But do you want to leave that bad?
It's just a question...
Roy, Lets go on a adventure!
Sorry Rose I get sea sick.
Oh Roy its always the same with you, Your just
afraid of leaving.
[sigh] Fine....if you really wanna go I guess i'll
come.
OK its decided,Tomorrow at sunset we'll go!
...K
Thats How it happens and Just wait till i have a short demo stuff will be edited and hopefully it will be acceptable for you guys
and sorry for acting gay in the 2 comments ago i was having a bad moment