I tried it out, it's a good first game, however, there seems to be a few errors.
Firstly, there are numerous spelling mistakes, My advice would be to have someone run through your game and spell-check.
Secondly, I felt like I wasn't in control of anything for the first ten minutes, I wanted to explore, not get dragged around, but, that's just a personal preference.
Thirdly, your monsters didn't do any damage to me when they attacked.
Other then that, for a first attempt, it was good.