[Writing] A poem I did back in 7th Grade...

[Miles Castea]

I remembered doing this poem back in 7th Grade.

Imperialism may seem bad and unfair
Our empire is small at first
But our power is mighty
Each day and night, we rule with an iron fist
Any duel we will win with quick-witted and powerful ways
Our leader is no coward, instead a brave leader
For traitors, the crypt is the reward
Enemy ships be warned, raiders ahead
We tell lies, to indoctrinate our citizens
We will fight in any weather, even rain
Our leader will guide us with light
Our country will rule with divine authority
Our fate will depend one our citizens
At the rate, our empire may disintegrate or thrive
Or our people may take a dive
Or our empire will be in trouble
If we don't fix it
We'll be dead
And gone as the wind...

[Leventhan]

It lacks feeling.
Not good.

[Miles Castea]

It lacks feeling.
Not good.

HEY!
I was 13 back then, I didn't have much in my head.

[JAP]

I'm 13!!

[Nightwolf]

I remember when i was in seventh, when i was 12.


last year ftw.

[Leventhan]

Age doesn't really make a difference or discriminate the smart from the creative.
All that counts is the inspiration.


Heck, I'm only 15.

I'm 13!!

She's the same age as you, and she already writes wacky stories about lolicons.
And other sexual orientations.

[JAP]

...
Is that good or bad? O.o

[Kokowam]

Good XD

I remember when i was in seventh, when i was 12.


last year ftw.

Same XD

[firerain]

It lacks feeling.
Not good.

Well, it was based on the emperor/medieval army time. Showing feeling was a sign of weakness.

[JAP]

Do you think feeling is only saddy cheesy touchy?

He could add some wrath into that poem, and wrath is feeling too.

[Nightwolf]

...
Is that good or bad? O.o

GrAVEDIGGER

[verbaism]

Do you think feeling is only saddy cheesy touchy?

He could add some wrath into that poem, and wrath is feeling too.

I guess you've got your literature senses back. =)

[Nightwolf]

war lol should have a saddish feeling.
Your emporers dying and you're sitting like "Oh Man nothings happening"

Anyways, i know how i was in the seventh grade, so does Halo, Dwarra, Silver and Bodge so i cant say much