[Writing] Peace

Since you all suck at writing, I have decided to write something here.

Peace

Peace is freedom from war, a time of celebration
Shouts of joy are echoed through the nation
But mourners in black line the grave
Of the poor young soldier who we could not save
But do not cry, rejoice, rejoice, rejoice
From the smiling heavens cries his happy voice
We were willing to save, but his life we could not
But he is not in vain, for he is with his lot
He cheers with the world, the war is over
The evil storm called war has blown over
Peace, a time of rejoice
Let all sing out with their own voice

Uhm...

I won't say it's bad, great rhyming after all...

But somehow, it's just... It's just... Untouching...

what she said because i think you have a little to much overconfidence.

If you were joking about us sucking, put it in the [joke][/joke] things.

Write something better

Well, if it's a really great poetry, it would move someone's heart on or anything... But yours is just... Not even makes me feel anything.

And you proved yourself to be over-over-confident.


YOU THINK YOU'RE GREAT, i bet JAPPY CAN SQUASH YOU UNDER MY FOOT.

Errrr....

Why me...? O.o

Oh, so this is Jappy's true form. Scared and whimpy, not helping a friend.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!

I'm just asking you why!!

NO WORRIES SISBRO I GOT YOUR BACK!!

Bad poem.
Too many rythm.

A good poem have the least amount of words possible to touch someone.
Study more.

it's not that bad, it's a 6.5/10.

I kinda wrote it in five minutes
and it was an English project, it had to rhyme like that

I wrote a song

The Black Rose
From the depths of my heart
There lies, a lonely flower
It is as dark as night
But as beautiful as the light
The Black Rose, the Black Rose

Chorus
I feel, all alone
I’m going, on my own
It’s as dark as night
but beautiful like the light,
The Black Rose, the Black rose
(Repeat once)

Verse 1
I’m lost, not to be found
I feel trapped in a cage
When all is black
There is a light at the end
Of the tunnel, the tunnel
Without you, I feel pain
Emotional scars are on me
I am, suffering
More pain than imaginable
Imaginable, imaginable

Chorus

Verse 2
Oh pure maiden
Where are you
I may have lost you
But I still love you
Love you, love you
I am a lost soul
Wandering the Earth for you
You reminded me of one thing
One small plant that is like this
The Black Rose, the black rose

Chorus

Bridge
Where have you been my love?
It’s been years since last since I saw you last
(Chorus)

Urm.. If it's a song, why don't you post the track? That'll be awww-some! =D

 
I wrote lyrics

I know.

But a lyrics of a song would mean more if there's music beside it.

i can make a song on that.


though i never made one with words.

xD

Nightwolf owns!!

It's better than before, Forcystus.

xD

Nightwolf owns!!

Thank you very much.
And i think i will make this song, good practice and a way to get Zypher in my hands.

AGAIN.

If its good, I will use it when I have a band