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Title: [Writing] Blood, Blood
Post by: JAP on October 05, 2007, 05:28:46 AM
Blood, Blood
A Poem by JAP

Blood, blood
Cherry red gloom
Flowing like tears
The end is near

Blood, blood
Thick crimson flood
Killing my fear
Washing the rear

Blood, blood
Splattered, blotch
Filling up near
Dripping great

Blood, blood
Blood, blood
Blood, blood
Blood...

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Did that in 5 minutes, my fastest record!! XD I'm just a blood freak, so I wrote that in the middle of the Physics test! x3

Comments and critiques are really appreciated!! >O<
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: Nightwolf on October 05, 2007, 11:28:33 AM
[Critique] I don't understand 'blotch' [/critique]
[comment] It's like those artistic poems, which shakespear wrote and you don't get it the first time, but its good [/comment]
[other notes] Play unreal or something if you like blood[/other notes]
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: JAP on October 05, 2007, 11:51:25 AM
XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

I REALLY REALLY LOVE YOU NIGHTWOLF~!!
THANK YOU VERY MUCH~! =3

Blotch... Errr, I think it's the synonym of 'drops'. I think.
Yes, my style is rather old. I'm influenced by Edgar Allan Poe... Too influenced? =D Just love to write those macabre poems.
Hmm, I never played Unreal, but I had played Drakengard and can't help but to turn the blood effect on. X3 SO BLOODY~! Thanks for suggesting it, though. I gotta try it out.
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: Leventhan on October 05, 2007, 12:49:25 PM
Not bad.
But too many the word "Blood".
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: JAP on October 06, 2007, 04:28:45 AM
XD Thanks!!

BLOOOD~! <3
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: Sophist on October 06, 2007, 04:35:30 AM
[jepoardy]"I'll take poems for 500."

"Blood, blood
Cherry red gloom
Flowing like tears
The end is near

Blood, blood
Thick crimson flood
Killing my fear
Washing the rear

Blood, blood
Splattered, blotch
Filling up near
Dripping great

Blood, blood
Blood, blood
Blood, blood
Blood..."

"Hmm... What is Blood, blood?"


"Oooh, sorry."[/jepoardy]

I like how it isn't all "AMERICA SUCKS POEM EVERYONE IS DYING WHILE I SIT IN MY HOUSE AND TYPE THINGS."

<3
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: JAP on October 06, 2007, 05:13:57 AM
Thanks!! <3 It's really an honor!

Well, I never understand how to write any American-styled poems after all.
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: Leventhan on October 06, 2007, 10:29:39 AM
[Sarcasm]
American style Poem.
[hr width=35%]
I like beeeer.

[/Sarcasm]
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: MagicNinja on April 05, 2008, 04:20:04 AM
Das ist BlÜd
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: SorceressKyrsty on April 29, 2008, 11:05:46 AM
Blotch is a sort of stain, me thinks :).
Title: Re: Blood, Blood
Post by: JAP on May 13, 2008, 12:42:22 PM
Quote from: SorceressKyrsty on April 29, 2008, 11:05:46 AM
Blotch is a sort of stain, me thinks :).

You are right. =3