OMG, you said le instead of the, thats so funny cause it's french, ahahaha!
ok, now fr realz, about your story:
the families are called science and magic? thats really surprising, i thought that they would use science and magic, not that these would be familynames Oo
anrgon... how the hell do you spell that? pls, record a voicefile for this Oo
the villain wanna have a war with a dead man? i mean, you wrote he wants to rage war against anrgon AFTER he died, would'nt it make more sense if he wanted that before or is that his way of a 100% victory chance?
and the villains reason for this war is cause he is an idiot? (okay, makes sense in some kind of a way, but it's really lame)
and sky was a couple? a one person couple? (if you meant kristine and sky(by the way, both sound like female names, so are they?) are a couple, which i am sure is what you wanted to say, you should say "kristine and sky who were a couple")
how lame is there love if they let themselfs break up without a fight to the death?
and, for now the last question: why don't you write your own story? or at least don't make it so obvious that you wanna have your own little romeo and juliet.