[Music] AbsoluteIce's Piano Keys

So.. Yeah.
I'm gonna post some of my piano creations here.
Constructive critism is a must.. I need your opinions..
I'll upload the music files onto mediafire, but don't worry,
the filesize is about 1.3kb or such. For now, only one though.
If you'd like the music sheet, PM me, and I'll upload them for you. c:

MBLAQ - Cry (C key)
http://www.mediafire.com/?51am915g8gmhf8d

MBLAQ - Scribble
http://www.mediafire.com/?goboe155mjt2mqg

There are some nice moments in this but there are also some issues:

*It feels way too long. The song is too simple to be over 3 and a half minutes long and it gets kind of boring quickly because of this, especially since the sections you repeat never really differ all that much from the last time we hear them.

*PARALLEL FIFTHS EVERYWHERE

*There are a lot of successive rearticulated notes (the same tone repeated several times in a row). This can be fine if it's done right and used sparingly but it's done so much that I quickly lost interest and it often felt unnecessary. This may be more of a personal preference of mine than a legitimate criticism though.

There are some nice moments in this but there are also some issues:

*It feels way too long. The song is too simple to be over 3 and a half minutes long and it gets kind of boring quickly because of this, especially since the sections you repeat never really differ all that much from the last time we hear them.

*PARALLEL FIFTHS EVERYWHERE

*There are a lot of successive rearticulated notes (the same tone repeated several times in a row). This can be fine if it's done right and used sparingly but it's done so much that I quickly lost interest and it often felt unnecessary. This may be more of a personal preference of mine than a legitimate criticism though.

I'll try to get better through time of endless practicing.
Thanks for the constructive criticism, Halo.
Anyways, here's another piano creation.
If you want the music sheets, PM me.

MBLAQ - Scribble
http://www.mediafire.com/?goboe155mjt2mqg

I have to admit this one is pretty nice. You use the "dissonant" chords really well and you have a good grasp on when to use them effectively. My only criticism of this is that it also is too long for what is there simply because it just kind of repeats again with no real difference until the end. It's a nice piece, but I would recommend trying to fill it out more and try to do some more variations to keep the listener interested all the way through.

But overall good work!

Also, these are just midi files, you don't have to upload them to mediafire. You can just attach them to your posts.

I have to admit this one is pretty nice. You use the "dissonant" chords really well and you have a good grasp on when to use them effectively. My only criticism of this is that it also is too long for what is there simply because it just kind of repeats again with no real difference until the end. It's a nice piece, but I would recommend trying to fill it out more and try to do some more variations to keep the listener interested all the way through.

But overall good work!

Also, these are just midi files, you don't have to upload them to mediafire. You can just attach them to your posts.

I tried to follow the song (MBLAQ is a k-pop group).
But thanks for the criticism! I forgot that there was a attachment option on here, aswell. ._.
Anyways, two new pieces ; MBLAQ - Mona Lisa, and Baby-U