[Writing] Quickie

[Kokowam]

I made this poem really quickly. I had an idea in mind and then I made it in a couple of minutes. I've never been one for poetry, but meh. I just wanted to get some feedback on it. I also don't have a name for it. I kinda suck at names. I actually kinda tried for a bit for the parallel structure

Wasteland

My legs lost their strength as
I struggled to take another step.

My stomach roared with hunger as
I felt it violently shake.

My arms froze and
I realized they refused to obey my will.

My conciousness slipped from me as
I noticed the darkness engulf me.

My ears were frozen to the point where
I could almost feel them fall off.

My journey was soon to come to an end while
I watched myself freeze to death in the snow.

But worst of all,
My heart was crushed and my soul was torn in two.

Credits to Forcytus for the title. Not sure if it's the best but it isn't the worst and I can't really think of anything else.

[The.Muffin.King]

When hearing the title quickie, i got the impression of something sexual, i was disapointed.

[Kokowam]

LOL. Sorry. I made a quickie sexual story concerning a man named "Ryan" and a woman named "Kate" before, lol.

[Forty]

a good title would be "Wasteland"

[Sophist]

Sounds emo.































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[Kokowam]

What happened to disliking people who described other things as "emo"?

[Sophist]

No, it's because 13 year olds can't think of a better insult or something to say.

"my sister just died in a car crash, this is so depressing."

"lol emo"