An Untold Story[demo released]

Me and a friend are creating a game in rmxp

STORY
You, a spellcasting warrior, wanted to visit a restaurant, but when you arrived the butler said that the restaurant is closed, you ask why. Then the butler said that the owners are lost, for a long time. You decide to help to find those people, while you are traveling across the lands you find out that there are more people lost... I can't tell you more, you have to find it out yourself ^^.

Characters
You start with only one character, at the end you have 2(or more )

Main hero:
Name: Theram
Age: around 20-30 years old
Gender: Male
Looks: Black armor, with a sword
Class: Casting Warrior

Features
Mounting system
Day/Night system
Side by side battle system
Map system

*more to be added*

EDIT:
The demo is now released!

download it here:
*OLD LINK/REMOVED*
if it woun't work

download this, and put it in \window\system32\
*OLD LINK/REMOVED*

EDIT: download links are down...
new ones

download the demo here:
http://files.filefront.com/An_Untold_Story_installgoodex/;4807805;;/fileinfo.html

if you have an error, download this, and put it in \window\system32\
http://files.filefront.com/RGSS100Jdll/;4807526;;/fileinfo.html

Screens

Villa Vladimir at night



The Side by side battle system, at night, in the woods.

I s'pose ur making it on Rm2k/3.
The maps are good.
Nice.

it's rmxp...
the battle map is horrible you made it so that the player stands on the tree..
(but otherwise it looks good so er.. fix it)

and if you already use the clock script, don't write numbers on the clock it makes it ugly

the clocked map got those flowers which seem to be a bit... too many of the same in the same spot.. you should make gaps or add diffrent flowers and maybe some dirt

can't see the rest of the map clearly cause of the night fog script...

story need some work too..
why are you a spellcasting warrior? it's the worse thing in every rpg... you are better off focusing your skills on 1 path
and usually if you wanna go and eat and the owners are not in the restaurant then you just go and eat elsewhere...

that's all i can say from what you showed

good points, but the player is behind the tree

i am still not sure, i can't honestly tell from the image if this is a trans tree or is the horse on the tree...
if i had a game copy it would be alot easier to tell

from what i can tell it's almost like the player is trans and the tree isn't

BlueXx you're right, the player is trans, the tree isn't... butI  don't knowhow to solve that problem...

Well, the maps are pretty nice, this CBS that is the best one of all, definetly, but it really looks like the player is standing in the tree.
 The only thing I didn

BlueXx you're right, the player is trans, the tree isn't... butI  don't knowhow to solve that problem...

hmm..
remove the tree  :wink:
(since you use a script which make them walk to each other simply make sure that all the battle maps have an empty space between the player and the monsters which is either plain or just got grass and flowers and things like that)

but what is a forest without trees?

a battle arena?

you can make it like a tree frame with a path or 2 outside (not showing where to) some broken trees around the frame and stones/flowers/dirt filling up the middle or something of sort

sorry, I don't get you here... this are random battles, on the maps where you also walk... and normally people don't walk in a battle arena all the time...

but I'll release a demo soon, where you can play the first chapter. Then you can see what I mean

EDIT


A conversation between the hero and this undead creature

that's the problem with that script

you should make a para to be incharge of random encounters

(if player move then random 1 to 30 if 30 then random X amount of other numbers
teleport to arena zone
if 1 then- encounter enemy
if 2 then - encounter another type of enemy

and so on

it will slightly improve the script since it will allow you to make special arenas so that trees won't kidnap the player)

oh and please.
PLEASE
don't use the word arshes in any game ever.
example: you made a 100/100 worthy of a game.
if you made the hero arshes or named arshes you lose 99.9 points.
i am not kidding >>

No, it's just that we don't have a name for him yet , and I got to put the hero name in... and standart it's Arshes...  

hey boi, love your mapping. you have potential.

The demo is now released!

download it here:
*OLD LINK/REMOVED*
if it woun't work

download this, and put it in \window\system32\
*OLD LINK/REMOVED*

EDIT: download links are down...
new ones

download the demo here:
http://files.filefront.com/An_Untold_Story_installgoodex/;4807805;;/fileinfo.html

if you have an error, download this, and put it in \window\system32\
http://files.filefront.com/RGSS100Jdll/;4807526;;/fileinfo.html

*bump* does nobody like it, or what?