The Exiled (working title)... my first game.

these are in the very early stages (i only have the first scene designed) Anyway i just wanted to bounce some ideas off you guys so please tell me what you think.

The Exiled (working title)

(u will notice that there are not a lot of names... that is because i haven't got them yet ) im just seeing what you guys think of the story) In this game a great general and leader of the empire is thrown over by a band of revolutionists that have found a great weapon that all thought had been lost. Using this weapon they are able to overthrow the government and the generals own cabinet turns on him and hands him over to official of the revolution. (enter first gameplay experience) They store himin the makeshift prison of a boat hull and awaits his impending execution to make his break. As he is being led out he makes his move and kills the two guards and makes his way towards the deck expecting a fight. To his dismay he finds that a skirmish has already taken place with all of the sailors dead and a hooded figure standing infront of him. His second in command has stayed loyal and is ready to export him back to where he must start his climb to power again only this time as a revolutionist himself. The game will feature many plot twists, betrayals, and maybe even help from an unexpected source. Thanks for reading and i will keep everybody updated

PLEASE TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK

this could work, if you execute it right. I like the start, also I Think the name does need a change. I remember seeing another project here that is named "exile" anyways, are you using rpg maker xp?

Good luck with this.

this could work, if you execute it right. I like the start, also I Think the name does need a change. I remember seeing another project here that is named "exile" anyways, are you using rpg maker xp?

Good luck with this.

yea i saw that somebody used exile after i posted this and went back to say working title cause i don't want anybody to think im stealing anything from anybody. I use XP and the tuts here have really helped. My plan (not really but what will probably happen) is that i will screw this up due to being new and when i get better i can revisit it and do it justice. Im glad you like the start and i will update with screens and such when i get further along

I think the idea is good. But like Nouman6 i think you should change the title as there is already a game here called "Exile"...

Ok just read your other post lol.

You shouldnt get so down on yourself, We where all new at this once. As long as you try hard you will succed!

i will screw this up due to being new

don't think that way...you probably don't know since your really new. I have only been here for 4 months. you can check out my game topic:

http://rmrk.net/index.php/topic,8339.0.html

and look at the support I get, even though I'm fairly new to rpg making.

thanx, im sure with the communities help this can turn out pretty good. I think the big thing i need to work on is my mapping skills

thats what I need too. I wish my maps were as good as some people here. (gilga)

http://rmrk.net/index.php/topic,9364.0.html

check that out for some ok/good tuts.

yea ive been looking at them a lot and the one that has helped the most is the outdoor ones. I use to have everything very neat and orderly not realizing that nature is random so that is how i should map