==Intro==
Separate what you consider to be the intro of your story.
-Did the Intro capture your attention? Have a third person reassure this, if needed!
-Was the intro paced well? Make sure it isn't too slow or too fast!
-Does the intro successfully depict the situation at hand? It should be fairly relevant!
==Character Development==
Briefly list each character and a few key words of what their personality is. Next, ask yourself the following questions:
-Is each character developed well enough? Will a third person recognize their traits?
-Does each character react to each other in a way that makes sense?
-Did you depict the character's thoughts, feelings, and actions well enough to fit each situation? (Look over each line involving them if you have to!)
==Dialogue==
Separate each line of a dialogue and ask yourself the following questions:
-Did each character speak in a way that suits their personality?
-Does the dialogue depict the proper emotions?
==Descriptions==
This is going to require you to look over nearly every sentence that is created for purposes of depicting or describing an event, emotion, place, person, etc.
-Did the descriptions say a lot with few words? (I like to call this is "Sophist Effect"!)
-Consider the use of metaphors and similes to get your point across by ways of comparison - but be sure to use relevant ones that make sense!
-Does every sentence have a purpose? Even if not a literal purpose - does it add on to the entertainment/mood of the story? This is crucial to cutting back on unneeded fluff!
==Ending==
Now, separate the ending of your story and think on the following questions:
-Was the ending satisfying - basically, did it fulfill the needs of the story?
-Did the ending create strong emotions? (If that was the intention).
-Positive or Negative?
-Was the ending too drawn out? A good ending should know where to stop!
-Does the ending get your point across?
==Overall==
This for the overall look of the story.
-How did the story flow? Make sure it's not unevenly paced! No parts of the story should particularly feel slower than others, right?
-Was the story interesting?
-Did the story carry a message or purpose? (Consider that some stories will simply have a purpose of entertaining)! Did it fulfill the needs of this purpose?
-Does the story remain focused on its direction?
(etc!)