The RPG Maker Resource Kit
RMRK General => Creativity => Topic started by: thatbennyguy on May 13, 2012, 04:36:34 AM
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Hey guys, this is the introduction to my new puzzle game, which has no title at the moment. Let me know what you think about it, the pros and cons, and anything else you want to discuss.
"They said I was dangerous.
They said I had almost compromised the whole compound.
Madness is the state of being real, I said.
They disagreed.
Friends started to notice me.
I had created something.
Not a coup, but something more.
A transformation, if you will.
The compound continually undergoes transformations.
Every single last employee that enters the ranks, they re-organize.
Re-shape, re-form. Every last entry into this cold prison I am confined to.
They locked me up. I was a rebel without a cause.
They said I would put the whole project in jeopardy.
"Define the project," I asked.
They would not give an answer.
I think it is because they did not understand what the project was.
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I seek a room. A special room.
A room that houses supernatural ideas. Views. Beliefs.
If I can reach that room, I could possibly convert my fellow co-workers, change their views.
Heck, maybe even the whole compound.
When the door opened to my dark and cold cell, I was set free.
I wasn't sure whether it was an accident, or fate lending me a kind hand.
But one thing I know for sure, someone, or something opened up for me.
I must find that room, at all costs.
And when I do, chaos will ensue. And by chaos, I mean the good kind.
My mind is made."
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Look like someone already took the idea for lifeless...
Back to the drawing board...
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Heheheh.
Well, better than most of the stuff on this forum...or on the internet. That's something. Your tense-change around the last stanza feels a little weird, even though it makes sense grammatically. I might see if you can do something about that.