This is a short story That I wrote for another site called Sullen Riot. It's about Green Day but that is what that site is about so...
Tell me what you guys think kay?!
This was completely different than I was expecting lol ;o
I really liked it! I already told you what I thought about it though, and I'm not a writer so I can't really critique but I did notice some grammatical errors. Oh, you and your typos :P
Yes. You have potential, and solidity. But the foremost thing I would say is that you have a long way to walk along the road of grammer and sentence structure. A long, long way.