I made this poem really quickly. I had an idea in mind and then I made it in a couple of minutes. I've never been one for poetry, but meh. I just wanted to get some feedback on it. I also don't have a name for it. I kinda suck at names. I actually kinda tried for a bit for the parallel structure :P
Wasteland
My legs lost their strength as
I struggled to take another step.
My stomach roared with hunger as
I felt it violently shake.
My arms froze and
I realized they refused to obey my will.
My conciousness slipped from me as
I noticed the darkness engulf me.
My ears were frozen to the point where
I could almost feel them fall off.
My journey was soon to come to an end while
I watched myself freeze to death in the snow.
But worst of all,
My heart was crushed and my soul was torn in two.
Credits to Forcytus for the title. ;8 Not sure if it's the best but it isn't the worst and I can't really think of anything else. ;8
When hearing the title quickie, i got the impression of something sexual, i was disapointed.
LOL. Sorry. I made a quickie sexual story concerning a man named "Ryan" and a woman named "Kate" before, lol.
a good title would be "Wasteland"
Sounds emo.
CRRAAAWWWWWLLLIIINNNNGGGG IIINNNNNN MMYYYYYYY SKKKKKKKIIIIIIIINNNNNNNN
:V
What happened to disliking people who described other things as "emo"? :D
No, it's because 13 year olds can't think of a better insult or something to say.
"my sister just died in a car crash, this is so depressing."
"lol emo"