I think it's a great first game, but here's a couple things I noticed:
You can't get by those fox things in that cave. One is blocking the way
Also, it gets kind of annoying to press enter each time I want to go to a different area. Maybe doors are ok I guess. And moving around narrow areas is hard a lot of the time.
There's no animation or sound for the Light Sword :x And no doors in the doorways
Other than that, it's a good first game! Keep it up and try to fix those few things and it should be looking better. Also, try to get more into character with your quests and work on the grammar a little bit.
Make sure to capitalize your sentences and put proper punctuation at the end. Also, like I said, try to get more in character. If you were that person and you couldn't get your fruit from the basement, what would you say to someone. Also, sometimes you want to go into detail. Like why does she need someone else to get the fruit? (apparently after I went into the basement I figured out it was because she was scared of ghosts
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Again, improper grammar takes away from the game and makes it look less professional. Of course, it's alright for someone to have bad grammar if that is part of their character (Like someone that talks with an accent for example).
And the most important advice I can give, is just keep at it and keep improving until it's exactly what you want! After a little time & practice it will be a great game!
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